America is a sex crazed country and sadly sex sells. Sex sells in advertising, entertainment, and in businesses. Models, strippers, showgirls, burlesque dancers, and prostitutes; they all have one thing in common, they use their body to make them money. Out of that list prostitution is the only one that is illegal excluding in Nevada. Prostitution is one of the worlds oldest professions and can be found in every culture. Although prostitution is seen as degrading, controlled prostitution is a good idea to make legal throughout America because it would create a safer environment for the women, crime rates would reduce, and viruses would decrease .
In order to control prostitution their must be brothels put in place, that would be regulated by the states government. As of right now Nevada has ten counties that allow legal prostitution. In Nevada a law states that any county with the population less than 400,000 the residents can vote whether or not it wants legalized prostitution in its county lines. After a county decides to legalize prostitution if a person wants to open a brothel they must first require a business license from the county sheriff and pay a license fee which varies with the county and are still required to pay the county taxes. When prostitutes register into a brothel they get regular health check ups for sexually transmitted diseases that the brothel owners pay for that are weekly for STDs and monthly for HIV and condoms are mandatory. It is also the owners duty by statute NRS 41.1397 that before employing a women that the owner needs to receive an HIV test.
By having legalized brothels prostitutes would have the freedom and the security of being able to reject any client that they would not like to work with. Because brothels are usually in rural areas, they are away from the cities and neighborhoods, which takes away the unwanted environment that include drugs, and crime. When brothels have a license no girls under the age of eighteen would be allowed to prostitute themselves in a brothel, this would take away any under age girls from being trafficked. By being in a safe environment the prostitutes would be safe from any violence such as assault and rape, that could possibly take place with street prostitution, because they do not have the security that brothels have. Police officers are more obligated to work with license brothels and file reports, where as when they work with street prostitutes the girls are left on their own or they risk getting arrested being that street prostitution is illegal. When women register at the brothel they can state if they want to be full time or part time meaning they go into the business being able to freely quit at anytime, prostitutes would not have the be scared of their “pimp” coming after them for wanting to leave or being forced to stay. Most often street prostitutes are forced into the position. With legal controlled prostitution a women who is interested in the business can apply for the position at a brothel.
Why should adult shows be legal and controlled prostitution be illegal when both of them are used to make money. Prostitution has been around for ages and has been accepted and not accepted throughout the decades. Every town and city has that one street that has it’s street prostitutes and there is usually a neighborhood close by. Because street prostitution involves so many illegal acts, such as drugs and under age trafficking, making licensed brothels would create a safe alternative to street prostitution. By having health check ups in the brothels it would reduce the spread of sexually transmitted diseases that would be spread to people that would pick up a prostitute on the street. Being able to legalize controlled prostitution would create a good revenue for the state, and the men and women could safely take place in the profession.
http://www.leg.state.nv.us/nrs/NRS-244.html#NRS244Sec345
http://www.associatedcontent.com/article/906197/nevadas_legal_brothels.html
http://www.leg.state.nv.us/nrs/NRS-041.html#NRS041Sec1397
Tuesday, February 17, 2009
Monday, February 16, 2009
Week 4: Grammar Girl Response. Proofreading Tips
Proofreading is very important. In Grammar Girls “Proofreading Tips” she talks about reading over your work, and even after proofreading you still miss typos. Grammar girl gives some good tips about how to proofread better and what could happen if do not proofread.
Grammar Girl mentioned the Bank of Kazakhstan released noted that had bank misspelled when can cause a lot of problems when the note is in circulation. The tips that Grammar Girl used were to read your work backwards which makes it less likely to pass over typos that you would pass over reading correctly, read out loud which allows you to catch your typos in speaking, always read a printed version of your writing because it is easier to read a piece of paper than on a computer screen thus allowing you to catch more errors, and the last one was to give yourself more time instead of reading it right away you give your brain a chance to refresh.
I really enjoyed this episode of Grammar Girl. In middle school I used to proofread backwards and it worked very well, but over the years I forgot about that tip. Reading out loud always worked well for especially when I did not have access to a printer to read my writing on paper, which she mentioned in her tips. When she mentioned to give yourself some time before you proofread made me realize that I always proofread right away. Grammar Girl mentioned that with newspapers they have the editors proofread it and I remember when I wrote for my high school newspaper that it always helped to have more than one person proofread my paper.
Grammar Girl mentioned the Bank of Kazakhstan released noted that had bank misspelled when can cause a lot of problems when the note is in circulation. The tips that Grammar Girl used were to read your work backwards which makes it less likely to pass over typos that you would pass over reading correctly, read out loud which allows you to catch your typos in speaking, always read a printed version of your writing because it is easier to read a piece of paper than on a computer screen thus allowing you to catch more errors, and the last one was to give yourself more time instead of reading it right away you give your brain a chance to refresh.
I really enjoyed this episode of Grammar Girl. In middle school I used to proofread backwards and it worked very well, but over the years I forgot about that tip. Reading out loud always worked well for especially when I did not have access to a printer to read my writing on paper, which she mentioned in her tips. When she mentioned to give yourself some time before you proofread made me realize that I always proofread right away. Grammar Girl mentioned that with newspapers they have the editors proofread it and I remember when I wrote for my high school newspaper that it always helped to have more than one person proofread my paper.
Week 4: Part 1 response. New Yorker Cartoons
In “Women and Men Speaking in New Yorker Cartoons” cartoons show the communication barriers between heterosexual couples. It is portrayed that in a sense that men and women speak a different language. The difference in the way men and woman communicate has been a topic for decades. Using cartoons to show the difference of communication in men and women is a good example But there are different ways to show that men and women communicate differently.
In everyday life you can see what is portrayed in the cartoons, you see it in grocery stores, at work, at school, and at the movies. The advantage of using heterosexual couples in the cartoons is that people can relate to it. A disadvantage of using adult heterosexual couples to portray the communication differences with men and woman is that a stereotype can be placed on both sexes. Their are different ways that communication between men and women could be portrayed. It would probably also be good to use children because in the “cootie stage” is were communication with both sexes begin. Another idea would be to use a mother with a teenage son and a father with a teenage daughter. A cartoon could have a teenager girl trying to go out on her first date but using a false excuse and the father giving a silly reason to say no, which would throw off the daughter.
Over all I think that the cartoons in “Women and Men Speaking in New Yorker Cartoons” a valid way to depict the difference in communication. Many people can relate to the cartoons on different levels. The topic of men and women communication will be around for a long time.
In everyday life you can see what is portrayed in the cartoons, you see it in grocery stores, at work, at school, and at the movies. The advantage of using heterosexual couples in the cartoons is that people can relate to it. A disadvantage of using adult heterosexual couples to portray the communication differences with men and woman is that a stereotype can be placed on both sexes. Their are different ways that communication between men and women could be portrayed. It would probably also be good to use children because in the “cootie stage” is were communication with both sexes begin. Another idea would be to use a mother with a teenage son and a father with a teenage daughter. A cartoon could have a teenager girl trying to go out on her first date but using a false excuse and the father giving a silly reason to say no, which would throw off the daughter.
Over all I think that the cartoons in “Women and Men Speaking in New Yorker Cartoons” a valid way to depict the difference in communication. Many people can relate to the cartoons on different levels. The topic of men and women communication will be around for a long time.
Week Four: Part Two Response. Exporting America
In other cultures you can find American fast food, entertainment, and products. These photographs show that many other cultures have embraced the American culture. Some of these advertisements I can be proud of and some not so proud of. McDonalds and Marlboro I am not so proud of, these two products that tend to get looked down on in our society at times and I believe that they should not be spread to developing nations, being that they are very unhealthy. As far a Nike goes it is a material object which Americans are fond of, but at the same time materialism is disgusting and can tend to mislead people. I do not agree with advertising to many material items in other cultures, because most cultures do not hold material items of high value and I think that is a beautiful thing. But at the same time there are material items from other cultures that might be good to embrace in America, this might give Americans more respect for other cultures. I can say that I am proud of Coca-Cola, Pepsi, Disneyland, and “Titanic“. Disneyland makes many people happy and tourists come from other countries to visit the ones in America, so I believe that by spreading Disneyland to other countries is a great idea. “Titanic” is an amazing movie and I feel that it is good that American movies can be found in other cultures; but at the same time when you look at our culture kids feel as though they need to look like the people in the movies, which I do not think is something that needs to be spread throughout the world. Coca-Cola and Pepsi are great products and other cultures have good soda pop that I wish would be advertised in America. Looking at these photographs made me realize that Americans do not embrace other cultures as much as we should. You can find other cultures products at stores like “World Market” but you can not find these products elsewhere. Other cultures have so many products, and entertainment that I feel that America should learn to embrace.
Response to Grammar Girl
Who would have thought that their was a spunky pod cast for writing. Grammar Girl seems like a great tool to use for online classes and in everyday writing. While listening and reading “When to use a Comma with “too,” ” I realized that I did not know that their were so many different ways to use the word “too” and I never thought about the impact a comma would have on the word. I have always put “too” at the end of sentences. I forgot that you can put “too” in different part of a sentence. Listening to this pod cast really opened my eyes about how commas can help the word “too”. I am glad that transitional adverbs were mentioned in the pod cast. Transitional adverbs are my favorite, I love using “therefore” and “however”; which I tend to use in my writing most of the time, and I find that I often use a comma with those two words. “When to use a Comma with “too” was a good refresher course for me. When I went through my old writing I found that I could use commas in different spots, and that I sometimes use a comma in the wrong spot, or somewhere that it is not needed in a sentence.
Response to Ken Ealy' s Rough Draft
Audience:
1. So the way I see is your audience either knows about your subject or doesn’t I am not to sure about that one.
2. I believe that the audience will agree with you for the most part. You use good some good examples but I do not really see the you comparing the two-stroke with what I am guessing is to a four-stroke. You sentences seem to misplaced. I think that you should go a little bit more into comparing. You mentioned four-strokes in paragraphs 5 and 6 which is good.
Reason:
1. You state that a two-stroke is powerful, reliable, and economical to operate.
2. Your reasons are stated in your thesis as well as in your body.
3. To strengthen your reasons you should probably state what the difference is with the four-stroke. Besides what you stated in the 6th paragraph.
Counterargument:
1.Your counterarguments were listed in sentence 4 of paragraph 5, and sentence 3 of paragraph 6.
2. You only have two counterarguments.
3. I do not believe that you adequately addressed the counterarguments.
4. Address more counterargument in the powerfulness, reliability, and the economical reasons of the four-stroke. Doing that will pull it more together.
Flow/Transitions:
1. Each paragraph does expand on the thesis.
2. The paragraphs do not flow very well. They all seem that they are missing something.
3. To organize it better I think that you could go through each paragraph and try to make some sentences more complete, instead of sentences that stand alone . I think doing that it will make it more understandable.
4. I would re-word the sentence about Dugald Clerk. The sentence comes out of nowhere, having that sentence after your thesis even though they are separated makes it confusing. I think that paragraph should be placed within the paragraphs that they belong to. Before you mention “Outboard motors on boats were developed” might be a good spot to talk about the inventor, but I would not start with Ole maybe start with in 1909.
Introduction and Conclusion:
1. You have no catchy sentence to start your essay . You have to have one before the thesis On page C2-a in “A Writers Reference” it has what you can use for that. I do not think it would be good to start your essay with your thesis, even though it can be.
2. Your conclusion seems fine, as long as you fix your body with the counterarguments.
Wednesday, February 11, 2009
Essay 1 Rough Draft
America is a sex crazed country and sadly sex sells. Sex sells in advertising, entertainment, and in businesses. Models, strippers, showgirls, burlesque dancers, and prostitutes; they all have one thing in common, they use their body to make them money. Out of that list prostitution is the only one that is illegal excluding in Nevada and Rhode Island. Prostitution is one of the worlds oldest professions and can be found in every culture. Although prostitution is seen as degrading, controlled prostitution is a good idea to make legal throughout America because it would create a safer environment for the women, sex crime rates would decrease, and viruses would decrease.
In order to control prostitution their must be brothels put in place, which would need to have a business license. When prostitutes register into a brothel they get regular health check ups for sexually transmitted diseases and condoms are mandatory. By having legalized brothels prostitutes would have the freedom and the security of being able to have health care and reject any client that they would not like to work with. Because brothels are usually in rural areas they are away from the cities and neighborhoods, which takes away the unwanted environment that include drugs, and crime. Because brothels have a license no girls under the age of eighteen would be allowed to prostitute themselves in a brothel, this would take away any under age girls from being trafficked. By being in a safe are the prostitutes would be safe from any violence such as assault and rape, that would normally take place with street prostitution . Police officers are more obligated to work with license brothels and file reports, where as when they work with street prostitutes the girls are left on their own or they risk getting arrested being that prostitution is illegal. When women register at the brothel they can state if they want to be full time or part time meaning they go into the business being able to freely quit at anytime, prostitutes would not have the be scared of their “pimp” coming after them for wanting to leave. Another plus that can be seen in brothels is that narcotics are not allowed on the premises of the brothel.
Why should adult shows be legal and controlled prostitution be illegal when both of them in some way degrade women. Prostitution has been around for ages and has been accepted and not accepted throughout the decades. Every town and city has that one street that has it’s street prostitutes and there is usually a neighborhood close by. Because street prostitution involves so many illegal acts, such as drugs and under age trafficking, making licensed brothels would create a safe alternative to street prostitution. Although prostitution is seen as unprincipled and degrading, controlled prostitution would be good to make legal throughout America in order to create a safer environment for the women because with normal prostitution sex crime rates would increase, viruses would freely spread, and street prostitution would continue to create an unsafe and unwanted environments in social areas as well as in neighborhoods.
In order to control prostitution their must be brothels put in place, which would need to have a business license. When prostitutes register into a brothel they get regular health check ups for sexually transmitted diseases and condoms are mandatory. By having legalized brothels prostitutes would have the freedom and the security of being able to have health care and reject any client that they would not like to work with. Because brothels are usually in rural areas they are away from the cities and neighborhoods, which takes away the unwanted environment that include drugs, and crime. Because brothels have a license no girls under the age of eighteen would be allowed to prostitute themselves in a brothel, this would take away any under age girls from being trafficked. By being in a safe are the prostitutes would be safe from any violence such as assault and rape, that would normally take place with street prostitution . Police officers are more obligated to work with license brothels and file reports, where as when they work with street prostitutes the girls are left on their own or they risk getting arrested being that prostitution is illegal. When women register at the brothel they can state if they want to be full time or part time meaning they go into the business being able to freely quit at anytime, prostitutes would not have the be scared of their “pimp” coming after them for wanting to leave. Another plus that can be seen in brothels is that narcotics are not allowed on the premises of the brothel.
Why should adult shows be legal and controlled prostitution be illegal when both of them in some way degrade women. Prostitution has been around for ages and has been accepted and not accepted throughout the decades. Every town and city has that one street that has it’s street prostitutes and there is usually a neighborhood close by. Because street prostitution involves so many illegal acts, such as drugs and under age trafficking, making licensed brothels would create a safe alternative to street prostitution. Although prostitution is seen as unprincipled and degrading, controlled prostitution would be good to make legal throughout America in order to create a safer environment for the women because with normal prostitution sex crime rates would increase, viruses would freely spread, and street prostitution would continue to create an unsafe and unwanted environments in social areas as well as in neighborhoods.
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